Tuesday, 19 February 2013

Comment friends outline.

Assalammualaikum. Today class cancel, but I comment my friends outline. This is my friends outlining.




English for Academic Purposes (BEL 311)

Course Details

Course                : Banking

Tutorial Group    : JBM 112 3A

Lecturer’s Name   : Miss ZuraidahBintiSumery

Title                       : Early Marriage Among Under Age Teenagers : Causes

                             and Effects.


Matrix Number
NurSyafiqahBinti Noor Azmi
NurHakimahLaiyinahBinti Alias



       I.            Introduction


     II.            Body paragraph

A.    One of the major reasons that the high school students marry at their early age is because their families forces the teenagers to get married with the men that their families have chosen.

a)     Most of the families want their daughter married early because they not have enough money to bear all of their children and to ease the family’s economic burden (Sara, 2012).

b)    If the teenagers got married, their husband will take all the responsibilities from their parents towards the teenagers (Indramalar, 2012).


2.     Despite the problem of forced marriage occurred among poor family, it is also happen to the rich families.

a)     Some of the rich families want to expand their business performance so they decided to marry their daughter with the son of their business partners (Khan, 2012).

b)    The chairman of the Union Parishad marrying his son with the girl under 18 age and was carried the bride to the father’s in law house using the helicopter and the chairman spent almost 10 million in the wedding event (Dhaka Sunday,2012 as cited in Khan, 2012).

3.     The teenagers’ families want to use them to settle down the family’s debt or want to use the entire dowry to pay their debt.

a)     Some of the families will force their daughter to marry with the man that they have owe to finish all of their debt.

b)    Sometimes their families said that the brides do not have the right to use the dowry because they are too young to have a lot of money, unfortunately, they use the dowry to pay all of their debt (Indramalar, 2012).



1.     The outcomes from marry at early age will affect the teenager’s future life.

a)     Women who marry in their adolescences are more expected to experience the process of separation within 15 years of their wedding (Gordon, 2010).

b)    Teenagers who are marrying at young age are 31% more expected to live in the poverty when she is older (Gordon, 2010).

c)     There were less educational achievement and limited number of schooling chances among the young married girls (Haberland, Bracken, Parker, 2005).


2.     The results from marry at early age also will affect the teenager’s daily life.

a)     Married teens have lower revelation to currentnews and limited social networks (Nicole, Erica, Hilary and Chris, 2005).

b)    The young teenagers who were married earlier will have less household and economic power(Haberland, Bracken, Parker, 2005).

c)     High school students who married earlier will have lesser freedom of movement and capacity to seek health care and family planning services. (International Women’s Health Coalition, 2011).

d)    Marry at early age will rising the chances of the teens will involve in domestic violence and sexual abuse. (International Women’s Health Coalition, 2011).



C.     The teenagers who are married early also will have an effect on their health condition.

1.     Most of the teenager’s husbands were transmitted their diseases to the teenagers. 

a)     Based on the study, the teenagers have the potential to get HIV if their husband is older five or 14 years than them, because 30% of the teenager’s partners were having a numerous sex partners before they get married (International Women’s Health Coalition, 2011).

b)    The young adolescences may be physiologically easier to get infection from HIV or other transmitted diseases because their vagina is lack from the protective cells (International Women’s Health Coalition, 2011).


2.     Teenage girls who marry early will also beaffected during their pregnancy period and on their childbirth.

a)     The teenagers who get pregnant at the age of 15 until 19 years old have higher risk to death during their pregnancy period because their body is not strong enough and still at the growth stage (International Women’s Health Coalition, 2011).

b)    The young mothers will get the risks and complications during the pregnancy progression which can affect their babies’ weight and the babies have a higher potential to die(The Practice of Marrying,2013).

3.     The consequences from marry at early age also will give an effect towards the high school students’ mental condition.

a)     The teenagers will suffering when they got married at the early age because they cannot liveas a normal person like their peer friends (Indramalar, 2012)

b)    The teenagers only focus on their responsibilities as the young housewives.

c)     The teenagers were being forced to seek for a livelihood because of their husband is not carrying their responsibilities.

d)    The domestic violence’s in the marriage also will happen and can affectthe mentality of the teenagers who are not mature enough to do their responsibilities as wife and mothers at the early age (Media Centre, 2011).


D.    One other consequences from marry at early age is the shortcoming perception from the society towards the young adolescences.

1.     The society will considered that the teenagers who get married early have low level of education.

a)     Based on the study, most of the teenagers who get married early were not finishing their school learning (Mana Vue, 2000).

b)    The teenagers are lack in term of concern in college and inspirationfrom their parents and peers (Mana Vue, 2000).

c)     The teenagers have poor study behaviors (ManaVue, 2000).

d)    Women who marry before the age of 19 are 50% more expected to withdraw from high school and four times fewer to graduate from college (Lundberg, 1994).

e)     High school students who marry at their early age have educational and performance problems in school (Sanders, 1997).


2.     The society will presume that the teenagers who get married early were too exposure to social life.

a)     There was too much social life among the teens (Mana Vue, 2000).

b)    The teenagers’ parents will arrange their marriage because they have too much social life with their friends (Khan, 2012).

c)     The desire to keep the family’s good name and societal stand up because of the problematic teenagers (Khan, 2012).


In a summary, most of the teenagers and their families know about the tremendous negative impacts of the early marriages, but they were still preferred to ignore all of these impacts. These impact  will affect not only to the under age teenagers’ life and health but as well as the shortcoming perception from the society towards the young adolescences. [w4] 

 [w1]The thesis statement  so clear and it also attract the people to read the essay.
1)        [w2]They have many point to elaborate their points.
2)        All the supporting details are relevant
1)        [w3]They have many causes but we think it’s so hard to differentiate what are the exactly the point among the topic sentences of the effect.
2)        They find the point that give many input to reader.
3)         We also think that this group have already find many references and good point to support their topic sentences.
4)        Even they
 [w4]For the whole outline, they follow the format that Miss Zu ask them to do.

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